Dark Sploosh

There we go. Anyway, hello everyone. I've been a member of this site since March, but I haven't really been too active. I joined to get criticism on my writing ...

Hey. Haven't read any of those books you cited for inspiration, but I'll give this my best shot. Impressed overall. I like how Landon's blindness snuck up on reader. Wasn't ...

Thanks for all the reviews. By the way June, Velvet's review was for an earlier version of the chapter which was almost completely different, and nowhere near as good. Her ...

Gone by Michael Grant. It's some new YA novel. I picked it up because Stephen King said it had a really good villain. I'm about one hundred pages in, and ...

Author's Note: After reading it over a few more times, I decided my first chapter didn't start with enough of a bang. So here's a bit of a prologue, to ...

I feel I'll have to correct some of the grammar this time around. In addittion to there being more mistakes in this chapter than the last, it's hard for me ...

Told you I'd take a look at this. Now then, this was actually a really good first chapter. Right from the beginning we have a mystery that needs solved: what's ...

King of Babylon Dark Sploosh Chapter 4: Mama Bear Right as Jinn began his charge, I knew I had to get out of there too. About the only reason Jinn ...

King of Babylon Dark Sploosh Chapter 3: Wishes and Worlds We caught the bus just before it left. The driver gave us a strange look, which I’m sure was directed ...

Well, now we have something happening to Emma. She's stuck in this medieval style village, wandering around and whatnot. This leads me to something which confused me: Emma is an ...

I can't even begin to tell you how impressed with this I am. I've been looking for a well written multi-chapter work here, and I think I finally found it. ...

King of Babylon Dark Sploosh Chapter 2: Smokeless Fire It was a very strange situation. I was walking back to my dorm, side by side with this man I just ...

Here we go again. I'm sorry, but I couldn't help but roll my eyes at your protagonist's name. As this so far seems to be set in a realistic and ...

I'll tell you right now, I'm interested by whatever you mean when you list the genre as gender blender. That initial impression aside, here's what I think. I haven't seen ...

Quick Author's Note: This is a completely different version of chapter 1. I already posted it, but decided I didn't like it, and changed it to this instead. Please enjoy. ...